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Please correct the grammar issues and punctuation. more over suggest me vocabulary

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Anonymous
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Ramu is a hardworking and innocent. He is famous for his drawings mostly, he used to draw god figures.God enshrine in his drawings. Coming to his family he had married a beautiful and intelligent girl, for their love they have a naughty boy. Ramu dedicated his life to take care of there family as well as He want to give a better life to his son.


Actually, he is working in a painting shop. People do not know the shop name properly however, they are buying the paintings because of the Ramu. One day Ramu asked the owner about his increment in his salary due to pay the college fee of his son. But, the owner refused his request and degraded him by the vulgar language. This leads to a big quarrel. He left the job by making a challenge to his owner that is he will open a shope to compete owner.


Ramu has shared his experience with the owner to his wife. She supported her husband and encouraged him. They both have courage to do things better despite no one is there to trust and invest money. On the next day Ramu wife came with the money by mortgaging her jewelry. Finally, he started his business. initially there are no offers to him but after some days he got opportunities. Day by day he growing helping the others. 

Mahesh Godavarti
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One suggestion is to first try the free version of grammarly at www.grammarly.com.


The free version does give some good suggestions, but does not catch every mistake there is.


Here are my high level changes. Note that the constant changes in tense (present tense in the first paragraph to past tense in the last one) makes the story hard to read. I am not correcting that here.


Ramu is a hardworking and innocent. He is well-known mainly famous for his drawings  mostly. Earlier, he used to draw god figures.with God enshrined in his drawings. Coming to his family, he Ramu had married a has a beautiful and intelligent girl as his wife, for their love they have a naughty boy as their son. Ramu dedicatesd his life to take taking care of his there family as well as He want to give giving his son a better life to his son.


Actually, he is working Ramu works in an art studio painting shop. People do not know the shop studio's name properly. However, they are buying buy the paintings because of the Ramu's reputation. One day, Ramu asked the owner about his for an increment in his salary due in order to pay for the college fee of his son's college fees. But the owner refused his request and further degraded insulted him by the with vulgar language. This leads led to a big quarrel. He Ramu left the his job by making a challenge to his owner that is he will open a shope to compete owner. with him.


Ramu has shared his experience with the owner to with his wife. She supported her husband and encouraged him. They both have courage to do things better despite no one is there to trust and invest money. On the Next day, Ramu's wife came with the money by after mortgaging her jewelry. Finally, He started his business. Initially, there are were no offers to him , but after some days he got opportunities. Day by day, he growing grew by helping the others. 


Anonymous
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Thank you so much, Mahesh, Actually, I would like to improve my English language so, I am writing the stories that I know earlier. These are all valid suggestions I will keep in mind besides this I will try to improve.